Friday, December 27, 2013

Descriptions-Part 1


Salutations Writers,  
  
 Before I really start talking about today’s topic, I thought I ought to say something that I forgot to put into our Welcome Post. Hannah and I will be writing on Tuesdays and Fridays. We might occasionally have to post something on Saturday, or decide that we want to post something on Monday, but Tuesday/Friday will be our basic blogging calendar. 

    Now on to today’s subject!  I thought for one of our first post, I would start a small series of post about descriptions (i.e. Characters, places, etc.). Today, I will be talking about Character descriptions. 
  When you are writing a Character description, one thing that you will want to stay away from is a parts list. Some times, when I am going through and editing a chapter of my book I will read something like this:

 A tall, bald man who had tan skin, blue eyes, and moccasins walked in the door.

Gee…. that is a beautiful description. What I just wrote was (in my opinion) a parts list. I listed character traits, but when you read through them, it is boring, dull, and unexciting. 
    When you are writing a Character Description, you need to paint a verbal picture for your reader, and don’t worry about using the bold oil paints. Your description needs to live and breathe in the reader’s mind.  Stay away from the average features (like the features that you might have to fill in on the doctors office form.) Add birthmarks, and tell us what makes your character unique. What makes this person frightening, jolly, shy, or sick? Does your character have gnarled face, red cheeks, which are the color of roses, a furrowed brow and eyes that continually stray away towards the corner? These are tiny details. Little pixels that, when pieced together, make a painting of your character. 

J. R. R. Tolkien wrote a masterful description of Strider, in The Fellowship Of The Ring.  
     
         “Suddenly Frodo noticed a strange-looking weather-beaten man, sitting in the shadows near the wall, was also listening intently to the hobbit-talk. He had a tall tankard in front of him, and was smoking a long-stemmed pipe curiously carved. His legs were stretched out before him, showing high boots of supple leather that fitted him well, but had seen much wear and were now caked with mud. A travel-stained cloak of heavy dark-green cloth was drawn close about him, and in spite of the heat of the room he wore a hood that overshadowed his face; but the gleam of his eyes could be seen as he watched the hobbits.” 
 Tokien- Fellowship of the ring-p 153

This description perfectly explains strider’s character, without even a single word of dialogue. 
  Another (shorter) description can be found in Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone:

            "A tall, black-haired witch in emerald green robes stood there She had a very stern face and Harry’s first thought was that this was not someone to cross.
Rowling-Harry Potter and the sorcerer’s Stone- Chapter 7 pg113

This description is short, but it shows a lot of foreshadowing into Professor McGonagall’s character. J. K. Rowling wrote about her facial expressions in order to portray the Professor’s character traits.

That is all I have for today, my fellow writers. Hannah will post another entry on Tuesday! I hope you all found that helpful!

Salutations and a belated Merry Christmas,  

Emily K.


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